Adding Detail

This week, we had to add detail to a piece of writing. The writing is not my own, it belongs to someone else.

Never in my life had I faced such a difficult challenge. I stood in front of the cargo net I felt hot.. I would never be ready for this.

It was Physical Education and there was lots of equipment around. The net was something we all had to do and I needed to at least try to climb it. I was not a good climber, and never had been. I wanted to turn away. But I grabbed the net in my hands  and began to climb. I said words to encourage myself as I went. I was worried that I might get a rope burn or splinters.  I tried not to think about feeling scared of heights. I went more slowly the longer I climbed.

I stopped altogether. I felt weak and there was still so far to climb.

I called to the teacher that I was finished. I lowered myself down. I was thinking that I had tried my best. I still most likely cannot climb the  cargo net. But I was pleased I had tried.

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Never in my life had I faced such a difficult challenge, I stepped up to the front of the cargo net. My face was burning up like I was on fire... I would never be ready for this. It was Physical Education and there was loads of balls, nets, soccer goals all around.

The net was something we all had to do and I needed to at least try it. I was not a good climber, and never had been. I wanted to turn away. But I gripped the net with my hands  and began to climb. “You can do it, just stay focused.” I was worried that I might get a rope burn or splinters.  I tried not to think about feeling scared of heights. I got slower and slower, the longer I climbed.

I came to hault, my legs were like noodles, my arms had seemed to have lost their strength and there was still so far to climb. I called for the teacher, “I am finished,” I lowered myself down slowly, the whole way down I was thinking that I had tried my best. I still most likely cannot climb the cargo net. But I was pleased I had tried.