Narrative Writing - The Theme Park Breakdown

“Come on, let’s go Mum!” Emma cried as she jumped up and down on her parents bed. It was a long weekend so the family had decided to go and check out the new theme park in town. “Just wait Em, the park won’t close.” Her Mum was always so tired in the morning, sort of like her on school days, but this was different, this was AWESOME. Emma finally got her parents out of bed but it didn’t get better after that, her parents took soooo long to have breakfast in fact her Dad got into the shower an hour after they had woken up!

The theme park opened at 8.00am and Emma had planned to be there at 8.00am. “Mum, it’s already 8.39! All the rides will be full by the time we get there…. Plus we still have to pick up Rose.” Emma was walking around by the door with the car keys yelling. “You know, the rides will still be there and so will your best friend.” Mum replied so calmly like it was only 7.00 in the morning and the theme park opened at 12.00!

That was it, Emma ran out the door and started running towards Rose’s house. She only lived a few streets away so how tiring could it be? She was wrong it only took 5 minutes in the car but she thinks she took about 15 minutes. When she finally got there she grabbed her friend by the hand and started running fractionally back to the house just in time for her parents to walk out the door, “Oh, hi Rose, how are you today?” Her dad asked not even thinking about how she got there, “I’m great, thank you Mr Marge.” Rose was always so happy. They all jumped into the car and off they went.

By the time they got there, the sun was high up in the middle of the sky and there were a lot of people. “Mum can Rose and I go and check out the new ride?” Emma asked, “Which one, all of them are new, it’s a new theme park!” “The one called Invader Territory.” Emma and Rose replied at the same time, they had planned the order of the rides together in the car. “Okay, stay safe and we will meet you by the popcorn stall at 3.00pm. Okay so that gives you around 3 hours.” Emma smiled and nodded then walked away looking very excited.

“Rose, doesn’t the Invader Territory looks so awesome!” Emma hadn’t stopped talking since they left the parents. “Of course, I can’t wait!” Rose was so happy and chirpy that she did a little jump every time she finished a sentence. “Rose, Rose, Rose, when we get to the ride, you can’t jump out of your seat okay…. Stay in your seat and keep your belt on!” Emma was only joking and teasing so they both laughed and carried on walking.

When they got to the ride, to their surprise the line was empty, it was also good for them because they didn’t have to wait. “Hello two people please!” Rose asked but was so happy and excited that she could hardly even hold the tickets when they were given to her. Emma and Rose took a seat and the ride began. It was so much that Rose nearly took off her belt to stand up!

BANG!! Emma and Rose nearly fell off the ride, they saw that the ride had broken at the front and at the back. “I’m so sorry, I didn’t mean to break it!” Rose cried because she thought that it was her fault since she wriggled so much. When the ride finished, they both ran to find Emma’s parents it wasn’t 3.00pm yet but they needed to tell them.

“What happened, it isn’t even 3.00pm yet!” Her mum asked as she looked at the worried two. The two girls told Mum everything and after about 10 minutes they were talking to one of the managers, telling her everything that had happened. “Ohh, don’t worry about a thing! That silly builder, he thought that it would be cool to build a ride that would break at the end to scare everyone!” The manager was named Jordenne and she was very kind. “We are going to get rid of it because we have had sooo many people come and complain and we needed just one more person to come and complain for us to be able to demolish it.” The was a sigh of relief from the girls and from the parents.

The rest of the day was great, the rides were awesome and it was so much fun. At the end of the day just before they dropped Rose off, they got to go to KiwiYo, a frozen yogurt place. “Thanks heaps Mr and Mrs Marge! I had so much fun.” Rose said with of course, an excited smile on her face. “Yeah thanks Mum and Dad, I really had fun!”

The End